foxxcub: (best emo irish mobster by thisisironic)
aleesha ([personal profile] foxxcub) wrote2007-03-12 10:34 pm
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The Black Donnellys fic (PG-13)

Title: This, Too
Paring: Tommy/Jenny
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: through The World Will Break Your Heart
Disclaimer: NBC and Paul Haggis = not me
Summary: Her mess is your own.

278 words of Tommy!angst for Katie. *flaily hands*



You don't remember the first time you thought it; maybe the idea was innocent in the beginning, a kid's simple desperation. But it's always been there, crouching in the back of your skull, all patient and quiet.

She will never see me die.

She leans into you, her breath hot against your chin, and it's not out of love or pity. It's resignation, and that's mostly your fault, too. Jimmy may have started it all, but her mess is your own. And yet you tell yourself you can take it--this, too, shall pass, and that Shakespearean bullshit.

She threatens you with her eyes, dares you to be stupid enough to let her out of your sight; she knows, one way or another, that things will change for good once she leaves this basement. You wonder if she hates you as she's nudged up the stairs, hates your smarts and determination and how you never quite learned to separate the two. But you hold your breath until she's gone and then, for the moment, nothing matters but survival.

And you do survive through sheer luck and chance (Kevin would be proud). You survive so well you think, somehow, that tomorrow will be another day for you to dig your claws in a little deeper and pull yourself out of this shit.

She leaves before you can finish your thought, your genuine ode to Huey. She leaves without looking back; tomorrow is ready for her, and for Sampson.

She leaves, her hand tucked around his arm, and as your throat catches around the words you've suddenly forgotten, your body sags a bit in relief.

She didn't see you die.

[identity profile] falseeeyelashes.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 03:55 am (UTC)(link)
oh, wow. this gave me the chills. that last line, the way it winds back to the opening thought of the fic...love it. and this line in particular: your smarts and determination and how you never quite learned to separate the two.. that is pure tommy donnelly right there. this was such a perfect follow-up to tonight's episode; thanks for the lovely read.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 12:59 pm (UTC)(link)
Thanks a bunch! The last twenty minutes of that ep were amazing. Actually, the whole damn thing was awesome. ;)

[identity profile] cmonkatiekatie.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 03:59 am (UTC)(link)
Shut up!!! OMG, I can't scroll down enough so I don't see the words! Running away until after I've seen it!!

[identity profile] cmonkatiekatie.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 06:17 am (UTC)(link)
Psssh, [livejournal.com profile] fasleeeyelashes said exactly what I was gonna say! It's okay though, cause I got more:

dares you to be stupid enough to let her out of your sight is so very, very Jenny and that bit at the end, making dying not literal, I love when stuff is surprising like that.

I love this, it's like the show went on just a little bit from there.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 12:58 pm (UTC)(link)
I had all these thoughts and reactions to the ep itself, but they manifested themselves into fic, LOL. Glad you liked it, darling.

[identity profile] gobsmackit.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 04:22 am (UTC)(link)
THIS ISN'T KARA'S BOYS GETTING DRUNK AND MAKING OUT!

It seems lovely, but I don't get it, since I dropped TBD like it was hot. (But it wasn't.)

*crazy eyes*

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 12:55 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you for the wonderful BACKHANDED COMPLIMENT.

[identity profile] gobsmackit.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 01:53 pm (UTC)(link)
The pleasure's all mine!

[identity profile] gobsmackit.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 02:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh you know I love you/your writing.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 02:12 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm surprised you read it. :P I'M NOT WRITING FOB TO GET YOUR ATTENTION.

[identity profile] gobsmackit.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 02:24 pm (UTC)(link)
It was short I couldn't stop myself!

FOB? OH PLEASE, NOT IN MY NAME.


Though I wouldn't be averse to Skins fic from you. *grumps*

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 05:25 pm (UTC)(link)
I don't even know what Skins is. >.>

[identity profile] gobsmackit.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 07:24 pm (UTC)(link)
I really feel like no one on my flist actually reads my LJ, 'cause you're the second person to say that this week. And I've actually left you annoying comments about it!

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 09:08 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh honey, you say a lot of things in your LJ that I don't pay attention to.

:PPPPP

[identity profile] gobsmackit.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 09:10 pm (UTC)(link)
I need to realize that reading every word of everyone's entries for fear of being swallowed up by guilt is not necessary because no one caaaaaaaaares.
ext_16765: (Olivia)

[identity profile] arabella-hope.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 04:26 am (UTC)(link)
AW. I love the loop back at the end, for that to be the ONE THING Tommy needs if it comes down to it.

And LOVE this line: She leaves without looking back; tomorrow is ready for her, and for Sampson.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 01:00 pm (UTC)(link)
LOL, thank god I reminded you who Sampson was. XD

[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/slowdescent_/ 2007-03-13 05:00 am (UTC)(link)
DUDE. awesome narrating from tommy's perspective. rock on, i loved it! :)

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 01:00 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you, glad you liked it!

[identity profile] viggofest.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 05:00 am (UTC)(link)
This is great and I don't even watch the show!

You inspired me to try present tense and I'm excited to see if it will help me get the thoughts down on paper any faster or better.

Now if you'll excuse me, I must go see if I can bribe anyone into Jack Bauer/ "Mike Doyle" (character not actor) slash....

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 01:01 pm (UTC)(link)
You should try it! For short bursts of introspective, second person POV is wonderful.
ext_66588: (B/K Confront)

[identity profile] rhymephile.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 01:28 pm (UTC)(link)
The dice are rattling in your pocket as you take the corner at a run. Panting, eyes tearing up -- from the cold, or is it something else? -- your breath is hitching in your chest.

You're blocks away before you stop. Hands to knees, suddenly you're gasping. You can hear his voice on the phone, beckoning you down to the basement, and at that moment you know, you just know that you're gonna lose this bet.

Taking chances, letting it ride, anteing up...you've been gambling your life away, fucking things up and letting Tommy and Jimmy deal with it. You know they're down there alone with him right now, and he might kill them both.

Digging the dice out of your pocket, you make yourself a promise: throw an 8, go back. Cowboy up. Bring a gun. Be a man. Don't fucking cry.

The dice bounce again and again against the wall of the alleyway...5, 7, 10, 3, 6.

This life is nothing but bad luck.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 02:10 pm (UTC)(link)
...

OMGGGG. *slobbers all over you*

KEVIN. ♥
ext_66588: (Keller mugshot)

[identity profile] rhymephile.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 02:45 pm (UTC)(link)
I guess I have a thing for the screw-ups who are misunderstood ;-)

[identity profile] uscdreamr.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 03:44 pm (UTC)(link)
I love second-person POV. And I think you captured the entire spirit of this episode in this one, especially in the last couple of lines.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 05:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Aww, thanks, hon!

[identity profile] vegas-crystal.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 03:54 pm (UTC)(link)
I used to lurk around here every once and awhile - haha outgoing as hell person in real life, shy on other people's lj's - but i remember you had BEAUTIFUL prison break fanfiction.. and this was equally as wonderful.. ive been looking for some good Black Donnelly's fanfic :)

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 05:26 pm (UTC)(link)
Wow, thanks a bunch for reading! :)

[identity profile] ambiguousreason.livejournal.com 2007-03-13 06:20 pm (UTC)(link)
God, this is good. Sad and kind of hopeless and determined all at once, which is obviously so very Tommy, and Jenny too. *loves*

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-14 06:15 pm (UTC)(link)
Aww, thanks, hon!

[identity profile] spoonishly.livejournal.com 2007-03-17 01:52 pm (UTC)(link)
This makes me ache for poor Tommy. Nicely done.

[identity profile] foxxcub.livejournal.com 2007-03-18 12:04 am (UTC)(link)
Awww, thank you. :)